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It's A Good Night by ~criesblood:iconcriesblood:



if you're here
with me and I can stop pretending
that it's all okay

and I can hide in your shadow
and the ghosts will have to hide for a few nights
at least

at least

at least

it's not a dream if i can feel your skin
and brush your lips
and
feel you move in the darkness

and oh to feel your heart beat
in time with mine

i can finally sleep
©2009 ~criesblood
:iconcriesblood:

Author's Comments

I'm not sure what I was thinking. Ha. Anyway, haven't written poetry in a while. Thought I'd try it again.

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:iconriaelthepoet:
Its chaotic, like you had millions of thoughts and didn't know how to express them properly. Its good, but it needs to be refined a little bit. Chaotic is good but only if its not too chaotic, as to not throw the reader off.

For a long time of you not writing poetry I am glad your dabbing in it again. I hope your future poems are even better then your past ones. [link]

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And in one fell swoop, I had slain the beast.
:iconchaosmech2011:
This is good! Haunting, in a way. I can't wait until I can make these things a reality. :hug:
Lots of lava!

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"Come now, do you really expect me to do coordinate substitution in my head while strapped to a centrifuge?"
"No, Mr. Bond, I expect you to die."
-xkcd
:iconcriesblood:
me neither!! thanks a lot!
:glomp:

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i'm dead. sorry.
:iconcriesblood:
i didn't really have a million thoughts. more like one hundred about one subject. haha. would you mind offering me some suggestions as to how it could be "refined". because i wasn't trying to make this too structured its my glorious return to poetry and all.

thank you!

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i'm dead. sorry.
:iconpola-444:
lovely. I like the simplisty of it

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I love fully and completely, even though I know I may get hurt. It's how I live.
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:iconcriesblood:
thanks a ton!

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i'm dead. sorry.
:iconpola-444:
you're very welcome :D

--
I love fully and completely, even though I know I may get hurt. It's how I live.
=TimetravelerJoe made my lovely avatar!
Clubs: =RawEm0tion =sunsets *GLBT-Pride-Club

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